Thats a cute outfit! What's she wearing? Oh and, is she saying those words or is Ash saying it? Also, her eyes look great! Did you try something new? ^_^
P.S. Have you updated the story since 8/24?
Ah thats interesting! I love when people make up clothing for characters! ^^ But everything's just AWESOME just like you!
As for the story, take your time...I've been logging on to fanfiction just to make sure if it is, I hurry to read! ^^' You're amazing at drawing and writing! Speaking of writing, I was browsing thru my computer and ran across that one story I told yout about back when and I even tried to see if I could keep adding more to it but my problem is, I can't think of the words to say since my vocabulary isn't strong enough to avoid using the same word too often. Which is why I truly love your story! You are so intelligent!
Before I responded to this, I wanted to fit in reading the chapter. I did give my feedback but it wasn't criticising, I enjoyed this chapter!!! You are incredible! I felt the tension from Ash with everything going on and you ROCK!
I will take that thesaurus idea and see what I can accomplish with it! Thanks! I hope I can finish not only that but my animation too! I haven't been able to for two weeks back b/c i've had allergies...(not sure if I already mentioned that) LOL Anywho, stay sweet!